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Offline unicomics
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« on: October 12, 2007 09:20 AM »
here is a new animation did ive been working i hope you like it, its a digital manga

http://www.lifepoint1.com/kazahana/flash/u...cs/hgs1main.php

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« Reply #1 on: October 12, 2007 09:29 AM »
Quote from: unicomics
here is a new animation did ive been working i hope you like it, its a digital manga

http://www.lifepoint1.com/kazahana/flash/u...cs/hgs1main.php
who did the voice acting for it, cus it wasn't really acting
although the rest was pretty cool
<lenko> i saw a hedgehog on the way home if i was drunk i would have yelled IM DOCTOR RRRRROBOTNIK and chased it 

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« Reply #2 on: October 12, 2007 09:30 AM »
are you submitting this to any other portals?
i am dead

<+wwchicken> once i walked into the kitchen and there was a sound
<+wwchicken> but i could only hear it when i stood on one spot in the kitchen
<+wwchicken> then i turned off the light
<+wwchicken> and it was gone
<+wwchicken> then i turned the light back on and there it was again
<+wwchicken> so i thought, its an invisible alien
<+wwchicken> but hes scared of the dark

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« Reply #3 on: October 12, 2007 09:31 AM »
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Quote from: unicomics
here is a new animation did ive been working i hope you like it, its a digital manga

http://www.lifepoint1.com/kazahana/flash/u...cs/hgs1main.php
who did the voice acting for it, cus it wasn't really acting
although the rest was pretty cool

http://www.lifepoint1.com/voice/ the list there or if you watch till the end the credits tell you

i might be submiting it to newgrounds
« Last Edit: October 12, 2007 09:32 AM by unicomics »

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« Reply #4 on: October 12, 2007 09:35 AM »
the story was interesting. i got a bit lost though, i dont like reading too much in animations. the effects at the start were cool, really set the mood. also great artwork.

only criticism is some bits seemed like a comic more than an animation. could do with some lip syncing in some parts when its mostly dialogue.
i am dead

<+wwchicken> once i walked into the kitchen and there was a sound
<+wwchicken> but i could only hear it when i stood on one spot in the kitchen
<+wwchicken> then i turned off the light
<+wwchicken> and it was gone
<+wwchicken> then i turned the light back on and there it was again
<+wwchicken> so i thought, its an invisible alien
<+wwchicken> but hes scared of the dark

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« Reply #5 on: October 12, 2007 09:41 AM »
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the story was interesting. i got a bit lost though, i dont like reading too much in animations. the effects at the start were cool, really set the mood. also great artwork.

only criticism is some bits seemed like a comic more than an animation. could do with some lip syncing in some parts when its mostly dialogue.

thats why its a digital manga
edit: its now on newgrounds
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/404956
« Last Edit: October 12, 2007 10:13 AM by unicomics »

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« Reply #6 on: October 12, 2007 10:39 AM »
the art was great, but as with all comics brought into flash i had a lot of trouble with the pacing. there was a series called "broken saints" that sort of did what you did here. it just bored me to death regardless of the quality of the art. granted, that one had no voices. the voices did help, although some of your VA's were really talented (the old man) and some of them were not (the guy who kept putting a delay effect on his voice). i know you're gonna be mad at me for saying this, but i think this would just be better as a comic. it's really hard for an author to judge how long each piece of text should be on the screen, and some times i was only halfway through a paragraph and it would dissapear. other times it was there forever and i was waiting for it to go away. if you want to make something similar to this in the future, i suggest having people press spacebar or something when they want to move on to the next part. that would be easy to code and may save your viewers a lot of trouble, like myself. hope i've been helpful. keep it up uni

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« Reply #7 on: October 12, 2007 11:03 AM »
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the art was great, but as with all comics brought into flash i had a lot of trouble with the pacing. there was a series called "broken saints" that sort of did what you did here. it just bored me to death regardless of the quality of the art. granted, that one had no voices. the voices did help, although some of your VA's were really talented (the old man) and some of them were not (the guy who kept putting a delay effect on his voice). i know you're gonna be mad at me for saying this, but i think this would just be better as a comic. it's really hard for an author to judge how long each piece of text should be on the screen, and some times i was only halfway through a paragraph and it would dissapear. other times it was there forever and i was waiting for it to go away. if you want to make something similar to this in the future, i suggest having people press spacebar or something when they want to move on to the next part. that would be easy to code and may save your viewers a lot of trouble, like myself. hope i've been helpful. keep it up uni

thanks for the comment i will keep the things you said in mind

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« Reply #8 on: October 12, 2007 03:04 PM »
honestly it was lame but i dont think i could do any better!!

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« Reply #9 on: October 13, 2007 05:55 PM »
I think that's the nicest thing Taylor has ever said ?
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it sucks ass okay

and muse isnt that great anyway
thanks ill use this comment to help myself improve

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« Reply #10 on: October 14, 2007 03:45 PM »
top 3 maybe
i am dead

<+wwchicken> once i walked into the kitchen and there was a sound
<+wwchicken> but i could only hear it when i stood on one spot in the kitchen
<+wwchicken> then i turned off the light
<+wwchicken> and it was gone
<+wwchicken> then i turned the light back on and there it was again
<+wwchicken> so i thought, its an invisible alien
<+wwchicken> but hes scared of the dark